Expectrum's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[The Dot of Excellence 2]

Again, completely pointless.

It's just a bunch of still images and a song loop. It's the same as the last, just with more pictures and no movement at all. Fallow the same guidance that I left in the previous flash.

If you don't know how to animate things and would like me to show you how to learn, feel free to send me a PM. But please don't waste your time (and our time) with these kind of flashes.

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Wegra responds:

I stopped okay?

[The Dot of Excellence]

Completely pointless.

There's absolutely nothing to see in this flash. It's just three sprites and a small face. The only thing worth witnessing for a while is the music, in which case it should have been submitted to the Audio Portal. I have reasons to believe it isn't yours, though.

If you wanted to make a flash around that song, you should have animated something that we can enjoy while listening to it: not three still images and a moving sprite. Use your creativity next time and make an ANIMATION, since that's what the Flash Portal is all about.

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[When I'm Running]

Nice ;)

Good animation, indeed. Although I was expecting something else to happen at the end... like the dinosaur surprisingly become real, or something... but I guess you were going for the realistic approach, eh?

Nice. Why not try adding some sound effects next time? Perhaps a roar for the dinosaur, running sounds for the runner, etc.

OxSox responds:

Yeah I was trying to make this one more on the realistic side. But this animation did lack the twist that most of my other animations have (I hope). Thanks for the review.

[mingming 1]

Very good!

That was very well done. It scared the shit out of me when he went metal D= Not to mention the face of the ''grown up'' girl. But that was very well delivered. Why not try adding a preloader? You can get one for free here: http://www.newgrounds.com/downloads/p reloaders/

I think he raped the doll, though D=

[First Flash Animation]

Decent start :)

Since you want to improve, I will give you tips.

- First off, name your flashes for their content. I hope you don't call the next one ''Second Flash Animation'' :P

- Add a background. Seriously, you don't know how much adding a background would improve your work. It doesn't has to be anything out of this world! Just a nice thing that blends well with the action going on.

- Control your sounds. It was a bit annoying at the end, so be careful about how your flash sounds.

- Make longer works. Since this is your first flash, it is OK, but make sure to make animation longer, even if that takes you more time. It is preferable that you make 5 long enough flashes than fifteen 10 seconds stuff.

- Try to move away from overused standards: stick fights, DBZ sounds and moves, etc. Find your own original way :)

[Sea Psycho]

Pretty good!

That was pretty good, even more for being your first flash animation. It was funny at the end, although I must admit I was kind of expecting something like that to happen :P

The only suggestion I am going to make is that you should have added a little background music, other than the bubbling sounds. It would made it a bit less monotone, since the scenario doesn't changes.

Good job. I'm sure you can submit great work here at Newgrounds. If you have any questions about the site, feel free to send me a Personal Message :)

[Everybody Love Mario Kart]

Haha! Fun fun :)

Aww, poor Luigi ='(

Good job! Even though it didn't have much animation (except at the start) it was enjoyable. I watched it to the very end without getting bored or tired, and that is already an accomplishment =D

It was pretty well voiced, too. Who did the voices, you?

As for improvement, you could have used another font, just for stylish purposes. You could also have used smoother movements, but that all depends on your tastes.

Overall, nice work on this. It was fun and entertaining =)

[Street Fighter Series pt1]

Could be better.

I will congratulate you for it being your first flash, but there were a few things that if fixed could make the animation better:

1- Do not, ever, under any conditions, get an .avi to .swf. It just looks terribly awful.
2- Shorten the character presentation, or just show the one's that are going to take part in the flash.
3- Use different camera angles, and improve the movement illusion. The sprites look a bit choppy.

It was very good for a first flash, though! The main problem was the conversion from .avi to .swf

mortis5000 responds:

Thanks...I won't ever use a converter

[the luigi chronicals ep.1]

Not that bad.

You don't have bad ideas, you just need to improve on a few things:

1- Try to make the characters walk straight on the ground, because sometimes it looks like they are kind of floating.

2- Try to make the animations a little more realistic and smooth. Getting the hang of timing and speed is a must.

3- Make different camera angles. Things like zooms and such can improve the flash a lot.

4- Be careful when you use sprites because you tend to stretch them more than necesary, thus making then look unnatural.

5- Be careful where you place the sprites. Make sure they are all in place and that they look good.

6- Practice, practice, practice. Just try different methods and framespeeds, different speeds betwen the sprites in the movie clips.

With this you can do something decent =)